Kamusta readers,
Today I will be showing you about my writing this week and for this week we are learning to write a strong narrative. A strong narrative has to be believable, descriptive and consistent.
Today we changed boring, lame sentences into sick and more interesting ones. The boring and plain sentence I had changed and added new words was….
Anna. sat down. Anna touched the mirror. The glass moved.
and turned that into a much better sentence….
Anna gently sat on her knees on the dirty, uncomfortable concrete and carefully touched the unusual mirror. The glass VIBRATED like it was water.
Here's an image that made me have ideas for my story.
...and here’s my story in process,
Was this interesting enough for you or not? and should I continue it?
Wow Zahina,
ReplyDeleteI loved the sentence and the way you included it in your story. I think you are an author in the making and I would love you to continue the story. It is believable!