Sick Sentences

Kamusta readers,

Today I will be showing you about my writing this week and for this week we are learning to write a strong narrative. A strong narrative has to be believable, descriptive and consistent. 

Today we changed boring, lame sentences into sick and more interesting ones. The boring and plain sentence I had changed and added new words was….

Anna. sat down. Anna touched the mirror. The glass moved.

and turned that into a much better sentence….

Anna gently sat on her knees on the dirty, uncomfortable concrete and carefully touched the unusual mirror. The glass VIBRATED like it was water. 

Here's an image that made me have ideas for my story. 

...and here’s my story in process,

Was this interesting enough for you or not? and should I continue it?  

The Mirror

Mhoro everyone,

Today I will tell you what I’ve been doing for writing. 

This week I was doing a strong narrative story about a girl named Anna. It’s a story that I’m still working on. However it’s not just me who did a story about the girl, it’s technically everyone in my class. But when we did it, we needed some ideas so we all first did the question time. 

Here is the questions that I have answered to help me with my story,

This is how my narrative will go, but the thing is it has to sound believable, descriptive and consistent.