Narrative Writing Remade!

Kamusta readers

I have once more edited my narrative writing!

I have added a few sentences to make my writing make more sense.

I included how her friends felt when she was missing, how they reacted.

Here is my work,

Narrative: Let’s Write
Beginning: Where is the character? Who is the character? What is the time and place where your story starts?	Story starts with a sleepover, the main character, Layla, is in her car. The sun was setting. It was time to say goodbye to her home, Layla hit the gas (but not too hard). In her white, shiny car she  zoomed across her neighborhood to her friends house.
Problem 1: What problem begins to happen? Don’t fix this problem yet...	Dropped and lost her keys. The girls went to Mc.Donald’s for a little while to get some food and drinks. But as soon as they walked through the doors Layla’s car key dropped, no one noticed. That key was the only key for her car despite that, she was the only one from her group who passed her license. They picked up their food and raced back to Layla’s car. She reached to her pocket, and it was empty.
Problem 2: How does the situation get worse? Don’t fix this problem yet...	Someone gets kidnapped. They stuck together and walked back home in the dark and cold weather since there were no cars passing by. One of Layla’s friends heard footsteps behind them no one really cared. Suddenly Layla dropped the food she was holding and disappeared. They all heard the food drop and got frightened. “Layla’s gone!” One friend said in a very worried voice.
Climax: What is the worst that could happen?	It started to rain and none knew where the kidnappers were.  They all thought she was pranking them so they waited. All of a sudden they heard her screaming,”help please!.” They were like cheetahs racing back home to call the police, they knew she got kidnapped. However they did not think where the kidnappers went. But In the most unexpected time it started spitting, then it rained hard.
Resolution: What happens to solve the problems?	They ran out of gas and someone Layla escaped but she was lost. Layla wasn’t doing great either. Her hands were tied together and her mouth was covered. Lucky for her kidnappers ran out of gas, one of them had to fill it up while the other one was sleeping. Fortunately the guy left the doors unlocked. She ran for her life quickly and quietly.
Ending: What happens at the end? How does everything work out?	This driver passed by and asked Layla if she needed a lift.  A light was flashing, she felt scared. But she had nothing to be scared of because the light came from a car that had a kind driver the probably the same age as her asking if she needed a lift back home and of course she said yes.